Gems Mosaic
Critique my poem? Tough criticism welcome?
Hey, I'm looking for some good constructive criticism. If there's something you don't like, or you feel I could improve, PLEASE TELL ME! Don't be afraid to hurt my feelings 
Thanks in advance.
THIS CRYSTALLIZED WORLD
This crystallized world,
Is crumbling to dust,
Shattered like a gem,
The rubies flow like embers,
The sapphires like stars,
And the teardrops like men.
Too many fragments,
The edges blend together,
Forming a mosaic,
Of human tragedy,
As the light reflects hollowly,
On this shattered world.
So we collect these diamonds,
In trembling hearts,
As the iridescence wanes,
And the eyes go blind.
These gems lose their luster,
And the world melts away.
We're living within
A shattered world,
A scattered world,
Torn at the heart,
Breaking apart,
Yet this is how it must be.
For as the world dies,
And fades to black,
Man remains,
A solitary teardrop,
Floating quietly,
In an ocean of gems.
You're talented! If anyone tells you different then it's simply not true. My favorite part is"This crystallized world,
Is crumbling to dust," poetry can mean so many different things dependng on who is reading it. To me, this reminds me of how people crystalize this world, it's money, popularity, fame, but slowly even as they lust for those things it is all " crumbling to dust." I really like your poem. Substance over glamour is the best!
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